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The table below shows the production of milk in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010

The table below shows the production of milk in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010
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The following table illustrates the
production
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 of
milk
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 annually in the Netherlands, Australia,
Tanzania
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, and
Guatemala
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 between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the Netherlands accounted for the highest amount of
milk
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production
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,
while
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Guatemala
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 is the lowest. Australia has decreased the quantity of
milk
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production
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 over the
last
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 20 years; meanwhile, others have increased. In 1990, the Netherlands accounted for 11,262,000
litres
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,
although
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 after 20 years, it has risen to 11,466,000
litres
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.
Moreover
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, at the beginning of the graph, the
production
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 in Australia was almost 11,246,000
litres
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 of
milk
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, but it had decreased to 9,165,000
litres
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 by 2010. As can be seen,
Tanzania
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's
production
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 was almost 87,000
litres
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,
while
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 the
production
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 of
Guatemala
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 was 26,000
litres
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.
Then
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, in 2000, both of them raised:
Tanzania
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was
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had
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 1,42,000
litres
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 of
milk
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, and
Guatemala
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was
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had
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 55,000
litres
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 of
milk
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production
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. In 2010,
Tanzania
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 grew approximately from 1,42,000 to 1,55,000
litres
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,
while
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Guatemala
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also
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 increased from 55,000 to 84,000
litres
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, milk, tanzania, guatemala, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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