Some people believe that the only purpose for anyone to learn a second language is to travel or work abroad. Others argue that this is not the only purpose why someone needs to learn a second language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

There are many
people
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a new
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is to find
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or to
travel
to many countries,
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there are many
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reasons
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to learn
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, I will discuss their opinions and what I think, I will set them out below.
To begin
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people
who believe the
purpose
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a
second
language
is just to
to
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travel
or
work
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opinion
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experience
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they believe the
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the
people
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motivation
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,
however
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not mean it is the only reason like they assume, it is one of the many
reasons
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language
,
also
maybe the
travel
one of the significant
purpose
to learn a
second
language
, but if we take it on
this
way
then
we should to learn many languages to
travel
because as we know there are many countries who do not speak English or our
language
.
On the other hand
, the others who argue
this
opinion
,
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believe
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people
learn a new
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for
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many
reasons
and we can not
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it to
work
and
travel
, other than the first
opinion
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the
purpose
to learn
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a new
language
on a wider scale, without limited it on two
reasons
.
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Moreover
, we can not say all the
people
on the
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planet
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have the same
purpose
to learn a new
language
. In conclusion, In our era we have many
reasons
to learn a new
language
, there are
people
who want to learn a
second
language
to make
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new
friendes
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friends
friend
from the other
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countries
while
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others want to learn it to watch
the
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movies or to
to
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understand
the
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music or to read
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books
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, and
that is
just
for instance
, there are a lot
purpose
to learn a new
language
, I tend to agree with the
second
opinion
, even if they want to learn a new
language
to
travel
or
work
or make relationships or for games or study,
what ever
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the
purpose
or the
reasons
, it
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depends
on their dream or goal,
for example
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English to read the books and to complete my study aboard, so the reason not because the
work
or
travel
.
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Your essay provides a complete response to the task, discussing both perspectives and offering your own opinion. However, try to develop your ideas in more detail to fully address the prompt.
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Ensure ideas and arguments are organized logically. At times, there’s a lack of clear transitions between points, which can confuse the reader.
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Provide specific examples to support your ideas. This will make your argument more convincing and relatable to the reader.
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Your conclusion effectively summarizes the essay and presents a clear personal opinion, which is an important aspect of the task.
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You present both perspectives as requested in the task prompt, showing a balanced analysis.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly sets the context for the discussion, outlining the key issues effectively.

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