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The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates how many
times
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 three packages including
ActiveX
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, Java, and Net were downloaded during a
week
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 from the internet over five
weeks
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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ActiveX
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 experienced the highest level of downloading
times
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 in each
week
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 and
also
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, Net had witnessed the lowest number of downloads in all those
weeks
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. Downloading
ActiveX
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 has shown a gradual increase during these five
weeks
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 which stood at 120
times
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 in the
last
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week
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. It is noteworthy that a smooth decrease can be seen in the fourth
week
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.
Although
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 in all
weeks
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,
ActiveX
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 had first rank, a wide disparity was shown between
ActiveX
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 and Net in the third
week
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 which
ActiveX
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 was downloaded six
times
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 more than Net. Java illustrated a progressive increase over
this
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 period which stood at 80 in the fifth
week
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 which was twofold more compared white
first
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the first
show examples
week
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. Net,
on the other hand
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, had shown a fluctuation with upward trend.
Although
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 Net had experienced a substantial decrease of about 10, It had increased dramatically by 60 in the following
week
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words times, activex, week, weeks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • trends
  • downloads
  • gradual decline
  • surge
  • popularity
  • frequently downloaded
  • maintained position
  • initially
  • significant gains
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