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The table gives information about rail transport in four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table gives information about rail transport in four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The data displays on rail transport across four countries(
Japan
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, China, India, and France), covering three main aspects: the annual
number
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 of
passengers
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( in millions), rail network length( in
kilometres
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), and the
number
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 of employees working on rail transport. The country where there most
passengers
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 are
the
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apply
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is
Japan
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, It has 24.5 billion people per
year
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.
Additionally
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, the country
also
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 boasts a high passenger
kilometres
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 per capita, with each individual travelling an average of 3,400
kilometres
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 annually.
Furthermore
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,
Japan
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 carries a substantial volume of tonnes per
year
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, reaching 31 million.
On the other hand
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, France has the lowest
number
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 of
passengers
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 per
year
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, with 1.8 billion,
however
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,
this
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 country has
significantly
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the significantly
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 lowest
carryis
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carry is
carries
 of tonnes per
year
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, at 63 million, respectively. Turning to the two countries, which have a slightly similar
number
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 of
passengers
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, China has a considerably lower
number
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 of
passengers
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 per
year
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, amounting to 3.6 billion.
However
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, the passenger
kilometres
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 per capita in China are relatively higher compared to other countries, with an average of 1,019
kilometres
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 per person. Moving on to India, the passenger
kilometres
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 per capita are relatively lower compared to
Japan
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, with an average of 1,178
kilometres
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 per person. In conclusion,
Japan
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 stands out with the highest
number
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 of
passengers
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 and tons carried. French
While
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, they have lower figures for
passengers
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, number, passengers, kilometres, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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