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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)
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The bar chart shows ten countries, where
consumers
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 spent the highest amounts of
money
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 for travelling in 2014. From the
chart
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chart,
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 it is clearly seen that the largest consumer spendings were observed in China,
while
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 in Taiwan
consumers
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 spent the least. Studying the chart in more
detailed
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, it can be seen that
consumers
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 in China spent 110
billion
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USD
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for
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on
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 travelling, followed by the United States and Germany (82
billion
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USD
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 each). The
consumers
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 in the United Kingdom spent significantly less - approximately 54
billion
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USD
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. The least spendings were observed in India, Malaysia and Taiwan (15
billion
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USD
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, 12
billion
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USD
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 and 9
billion
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USD
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 respectively). In summary, comparing
top
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the top
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 ten countries it can be seen that the largest amount of
money
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for
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on
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 travelling
were
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was
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 spent in four countries, with the difference between the largest amount of
money
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 spent and the least amount of
money
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 spent
is
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being
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 more than 100
billion
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USD
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumers, money, billion, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 4 times.
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