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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The given table, depicts in great detail, illustrates how many tourists visited
Ashdown
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Museum
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 before and after renovation and the two provided pie charts, represent the results of surveys asking travellers about
satisfaction
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 observable during two different periods times.
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, it is clearly observable that how many of
visitors
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 to
Ashdown
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Museum
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 increased
at the end
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 of reconstruction
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as
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and
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the
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apply
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satisfaction
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 grew among them. To commence with, how many tourists saw
Ashdown
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Museum
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 before the refurbishment was 74000, and result
visitors
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'
satisfaction
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 before the renovation was as follows: Dissatisfied (40%), satisfied (30%), very satisfied (15%), very dissatisfied (10%) and no response (5%). on the flip side, the number of
Visitors
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 who watched
Ashdown
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Museum
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 after changing was 92000, and the result of
visitors
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'
satisfaction
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 after rebuilding was as follows: Satisfied (40%), very satisfied (35%), dissatisfied (15%), very dissatisfied (5%) and no response (5%).
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, the number of
visitors
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 to
Ashdown
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Museum
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 increased subsequent to
refurbishment
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the refurbishment
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ashdown, museum, satisfaction, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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