The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The given table, depicts in great detail, illustrates how many tourists visited
Ashdown
Museum
before and after renovation and the two provided pie charts, represent the results of surveys asking travellers about satisfaction
observable during two different periods times.
Overall
, it is clearly observable that how many of visitors
to Ashdown
Museum
increased at the end
of reconstruction as well
as
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and
the
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apply
satisfaction
grew among them.
To commence with, how many tourists saw Ashdown
Museum
before the refurbishment was 74000, and result visitors
' satisfaction
before the renovation was as follows: Dissatisfied (40%), satisfied (30%), very satisfied (15%), very dissatisfied (10%) and no response (5%).
on the flip side, the number of Visitors
who watched Ashdown
Museum
after changing was 92000, and the result of visitors
' satisfaction
after rebuilding was as follows: Satisfied (40%), very satisfied (35%), dissatisfied (15%), very dissatisfied (5%) and no response (5%). Therefore
, the number of visitors
to Ashdown
Museum
increased subsequent to refurbishment
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the refurbishment
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