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he table below shows the number of motor vehicles per 1,000 inhabitants in eight countries in 1990 and 2000.

he table below shows the number of motor vehicles per 1,000 inhabitants in eight countries in 1990 and 2000.
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This
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These
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 two pie charts illustrate how many
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percent
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per cent
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 of
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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employed
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were employed
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 for a
job
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 in
britain
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Britain
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 in 1992.
For
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example
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example,
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 there were 31% of
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the female
a female
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female
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females
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also
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 6% of male
employeers
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employees
employers
 for
clerical
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a clerical
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job
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jobs
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. Female workers had risen
for
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by
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 25 per cent compared to
male
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males
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 by that time. Respectively there were
overall
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 37% clerical
employeers
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employees
employers
.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 general labourers for
female
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females
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 1%
overall
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that
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apply
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shows us that for
female’s
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females
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this
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 work is taking the lowest
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percent
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percentage
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when
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while
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 male
workersget
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workers get
 the
hight
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highest
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 percentage of
this
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job
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overall
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 2%
of
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for
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male
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males
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. It shows the curiosity from
men’s
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the men’s
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 side. So
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the
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male
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percent
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per cent
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 who are applied for general labourers are 2% respectively
overall
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 3%
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percent
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per cent
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 who work for general labourers.
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Also
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Also,
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 both
who
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those who
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 applied for
crafts
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 male’s
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percent
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per cent
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 had risen
for
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to
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 21% because
female
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the female
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percent
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per cent
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is
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was
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 3%. When male’s applied for 24%. It shows us that
the
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apply
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for
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apply
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crafts
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 usually
men’s
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men
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 got
the
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apply
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high attention. So respectively
overall
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percent
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percentage
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 who applied for
crafts
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job
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jobs
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27
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was 27
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%.
Its
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It's
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 clear that 3 jobs like other manual, managerial
amd
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and
crafts
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 are
on
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at
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 the top of the attention for female workers compared to men.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent, job, crafts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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