The bar chart shows information about the favorite subiects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subiects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The
given
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apply
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bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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the comparison
in
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of
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the
number
of
students
and their favorite subjects (social
science
,
Science
, Language, Craft and
Sport
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Sports
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) in two schools A and
B
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen
as a result
of the comparison that
Sport
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Sports
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subject is the highest in the
number
of
students
,
while
Science
is the lowest
amonge
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among
all subjects. Looking in more
details
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detail
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, in
school
A the
number
of
the
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apply
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students
who like Sport
are
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is
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36 which is more
populer
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popular
than
students
in
school
B
only 5. The
number
of
students
who
prefare
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prefer
Science
in
school
A are more than
school
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in school
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B
for example
,
school
A has 9
students
and
school
B
has 2
students
.
In contrast
, in Craft
subject
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subject,
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there are 25
students
from
school
B
and on
this
as opposed to there are 4
students
from
school
A.
Also
, in Language
subject
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subjects
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student's numbers from
school
B
are higher than
school
A.
For instance
,
school
B
has 18 and
school
A has only 5. One notable point is that
,
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apply
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Social
Science
has few
students
in both
school
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schools
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A and
B
all approximately 16
students
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, science, b, school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • favorite subjects
  • popularity
  • comparison
  • significant differences
  • similar levels of interest
  • subject preference
  • curriculum
  • facilities
  • impact
  • trend
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