The two maps illustrate the changes of a school campus from 1985 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The provided two maps illustrate the development in the school. The former map reflects the school campus in 1985 and the latter map shows the school
area
in 2012.
To begin
with, primarily, the entrance and exit, and office remained untouched. Secondly
, in 1975 there was the
big library Correct article usage
a
area
the
south side which was converted into Change preposition
on the
Learning
Resources Centre and computer and some of its Correct article usage
a Learning
area
Change to a plural noun
areas
took
by classrooms. Wrong verb form
was taken
However
, the playing fields remained less than half and the rest area
converted
into Add a missing verb
was converted
pool
, fitness centre and some classrooms.
With regard to the north side, the two storeys developed into three storeys. One more additional building Add an article
the pool
a pool
of
classroom Change preposition
apply
constructed
in some Add a missing verb
was constructed
area
of playing
field. Correct article usage
the playing
Additionally
, the rectangular car park was converted into semi circle
in 2012. The small car park and classroom building next to the library in 1975 Add a hyphen
semi-circle
was vanished
in 2012.
Change to the active voice
vanished
Overall
, it can seen
easily that many new features were added during the period of time and the Change the verb form
be seen
see
totally
population was Change the adverb
total
also
increased by 800 students in 2012.Submitted by taniamall786 on
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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