The two maps illustrate the changes of a school campus from 1985 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The two maps illustrate the changes of a school campus from 1985 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The provided two maps illustrate the development in the school. The former map reflects the school campus in 1985 and the latter map shows the school
area
in 2012.
To begin
with, primarily, the entrance and exit, and office remained untouched.
Secondly
, in 1975 there was
the
Correct article usage
a
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big library
area
the
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on the
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south side which was converted into
Learning
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a Learning
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Resources Centre and computer and some of its
area
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areas
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took
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was taken
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by classrooms.
However
, the playing fields remained less than half and the rest
area
converted
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was converted
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into
pool
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the pool
a pool
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, fitness centre and some classrooms. With regard to the north side, the two storeys developed into three storeys. One more additional building
of
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apply
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classroom
constructed
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was constructed
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in some
area
of
playing
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the playing
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field.
Additionally
, the rectangular car park was converted into
semi circle
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semi-circle
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in 2012. The small car park and classroom building next to the library in 1975
was vanished
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vanished
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in 2012.
Overall
, it can
seen
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be seen
see
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easily that many new features were added during the period of time and the
totally
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total
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population was
also
increased by 800 students in 2012.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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