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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuel should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays the
debates
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 about finding out and replacing other fuels
instead
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 of fossil
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fuel
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 is a hot trend.
Altough
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 there are many other problems that need to be solved around the world, in my
opinion
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this
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 replacement should be the priority of the governments.
Firstly
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,there
have
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 been
rapid
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 increase in the usage of fossil
fuel
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therefore
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,we might face the challenge of running out
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this
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of this
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 kind of
fuel
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 in the near future.
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 valuable
fuel
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contribute
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 significantly to our everyday life
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 as manufacturing power and gas,powering different tools that we use daily for our chores.The lack of fossil
fuel
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have
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 a destructive impact on people's
life
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 that can lead to
exsinct
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extinction
 of
human
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 eventually.
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 finding the new alternative can be time-consuming which is another reason why it should be
prioritiz
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prioritized
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.Governments and
scientist
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 should explore quickly and carefully
throughout
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apply
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different alternatives to choose the best
option
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 to replace
it
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 before consuming all
of
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the fossil
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fuel
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fuels
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.
Secondly
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,searching for new
alternative
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alternatives
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 could be as
comlicated
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complicated
 as solving
the
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 complex mystery.There are lots of
factor
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factors
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 to consider before introducing the new
option
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 for public use,
for
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instance
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 the expenses that it might cause,the rate of
hazardouness
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hazardous
hazardousness
 of
this
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 new
option
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 and whether it would be available for all the nations.Solar energy was the recent choice for replacing
the
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fossil
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fuel
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fuels
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 but not all
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countries have the money and tools to use them. In conclusion,
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 some people might believe that there are more important problems like poverty,
femine
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famine
feminine
 and natural accidents that have to be handled, in my opinion searching for
new
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a new
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option
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 to replace
the
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fossil
fuel
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 is more
cruical
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crucial
critical
 to
taken
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 care of,
otherwise
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 next generation might face the deathly problems in future.

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clarity of ideas
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use of examples
Incorporate relevant and specific examples that directly illustrate your main points. This adds depth to your arguments and strengthens your position.
transition use
Refine your transitions between paragraphs to improve the overall flow of the essay, making it easier for readers to follow the logical progression of your ideas.
structure highlight
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively outlining your stance on the topic and summarizing the main points.
task response highlight
You have recognized the need for prioritized global action on alternative energy sources, which is crucial for a strong argument in response to the prompt.
argument strength highlight
Your attempt to address counterarguments strengthens your position by acknowledging other perspectives and justifying your focus on alternative energy.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • renewable energy
  • climate change
  • sustainability
  • pollution
  • energy security
  • job creation
  • technological innovation
  • energy independence
  • price stability
  • environmental degradation
  • resource sustainability
  • international collaboration
  • global priority
  • energy transition
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