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The parents of your Australlan friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for himlher. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter • say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party •explain why you won't be able to attend the party •give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time.

#parents #australlan #friend #chris #surprise #birthday #party #himlher #•explain #•give #plan #time
Hi
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Hi,
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 Chris's
Parent
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Parents
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, Hope you are doing well. I'm writing
this
 letter to inform you regarding about
chris
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Chris
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 birthday party. First of all, he was so
exicted
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excited
for
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about
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this
year
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year's
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 birthday
pary
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party
 because he is going to turn 25 years old. Unfortunately, I
wont
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won't
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able
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be able
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 to come and attend the party
this
 time
due to
date
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a date
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 conflict with my exam schedule. Once
i
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I
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completed
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complete
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 my exam,
i
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I
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 will come to the place for the summer break and spend
the
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a
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 vast amount of time with you guys. I hope
chris
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Chris
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also
planning
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planning to
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 take
vacation
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a vacation
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 from
the
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apply
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work. After two months,
i
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I
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 will come over and we can go for
road
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a road
the road
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 trip to
montreal
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Montreal
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. Missing you guys, see you soon. Lovely. Dhivya Ravi
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logical structure
Enhance the logical flow of ideas by organizing similar thoughts together and using more transition words.
single idea per paragraph
Consider breaking the text into distinct paragraphs, ensuring each paragraph conveys a single key idea clearly.
suitable writing tone
Warm and friendly tone appropriate for a letter to a friend's parents.
complete response
Includes all necessary points: why Chris will enjoy the party, reason for absence, and future plans.
greeting and closing
A pleasant opening and closing that appropriately addresses the audience.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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