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summarise the information by slecting and reporting the main features about why agricultural land becomes less productive

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During
1990s
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, the main causes of worldwide land
degration
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degradation
are
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 in first spot over-grazin with 35%, deforestation
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 30%, over-cultivation
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 28% and
finally
 other reasons with 7%; if we have to make a comparison, we look at the region most affected was Europe with 23% as total land degraded, following by Ocean with 13% and
finally
 North America with 5%. From an objective point of view, these
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 are directly related
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 the habitant's
numer
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number
,
therefore
 between more people, more quantity of
meet
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meat
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, vegetables,
cereals
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and cereals
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 are necessary to keep an adequate physical and mental health. On the
othe
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other
 hand, we could see that
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Europe had a high quantity of
deforestacion
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deforestation
, in
orden
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order
 to need more
place
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places
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 to build vertical buildings as
consequence
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 to rising of the
poblation
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population
oblation
,
insted
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instead
 of horizontal
building
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buildings
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as
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 North America or Oceania. In a nutshell,
its
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it is
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 important
has
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 a
gloval
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global
 vision to know the real situation in
1990s
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, because it is
a
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 interesting history
relate
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 the Second World War.
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coherence cohesion
Include a clearer introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay into clear paragraphs with topic sentences to enhance readability.
supported main points
Ensure that each paragraph supports the main argument with specific evidence and examples.
task achievement
Clarify the relationship between historical events and land degradation causes for better clarity.
task achievement
Review grammar and vocabulary for minor errors to improve fluency and accuracy.
relevant specific examples
The essay provides relevant figures and comparisons about land degradation causes.
task achievement
There is an attempt to link agricultural land productivity with population growth and urban planning.
introduction conclusion present
The essay includes a conclusion that summarizes the discussed ideas.

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