The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions the world during the 1990s.
The graphic chart gives information about the main causes of
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worldwide
land degradation
as well as
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are well-defined. The table illustrates the ratio percentages of land degradation by region around the world.
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the first spot is
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over-grazing is the most notable issue at 35%, in second place
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deforestation at 30%, followed the over-cultivation and
finally
with a small fraction
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unknown
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at 7%.
On the other hand
, the grad compares the different causes of land degradation between
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regions,
as a
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Europe shows a
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large
portion mainly in deforestation at 9.8% in
comparision
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comparison
with the other two regions but
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in over-grazing.
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Europe takes the
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first
position in the total ranking. Despite Oceania
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an insignificant over-cultivation number takes
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second place and
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North America. In a nutshell, the dates
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the
sames
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same
problems
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have
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a different impact
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on the region.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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