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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the percentages of
people
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 who have
coffee
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 and
tea
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 drinking habits divided by what type of
coffee
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 or
tea
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 they bought in the
last
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 four weeks (fresh,
instant
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, or directly bought in a café) in five cities (
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, Brisban,
Adelaide
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,
Hobart
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) in Australia.
Overall
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,
people
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 who directly took
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in a café had the majority among bought fresh and
instant
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coffee
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.
Conversely
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,
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 four weeks had the lowest percentages. In terms of drinking habits in five cities,
people
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 in
Hobart
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 had the highest rate of drinking habits.
Adelaide
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 had the fewest communities
who
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that
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 were
favored
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favoured
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 in drinking
coffee
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 or
tea
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.
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, and
Hobart
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 had around 60% of
people
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 who directly bought
coffee
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 in the
last
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 four weeks,
while
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 only approximately 40% of
Adelaide
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’s
people
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 who had a
favor
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favour
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 went to
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the cafe
a cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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.
Moreover
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, 50% of Brisban's population had
this
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 habit, which is a bit higher than
Adelaide
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's. Turn to purchased
instant
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coffee
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 in the
last
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 month, Brisban,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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 had around 50%, respectively.
Conversely
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,
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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 had around 40% of the population who
favored
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favoured
show examples
instant
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coffee
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.
On the other hand
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, there were around 30% of Brisban’s and
Adelaide
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’s
people
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 respectively had drinking fresh
coffee
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/
tea
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 as their habit.
While
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 around 40% of
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, and
Hobart
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people
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 had sipped fresh
coffee
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 as a habit.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "conversely, last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, tea, instant, sydney, melbourne, adelaide, hobart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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