The diagram details the process of making smoked fish.

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The diagram specifics the stages are made smoked

fish

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, the are 11 stages in the prosses, beginning with fishing and culminating in

fish

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shop sell.

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, people are fishing from the sea or river and put the

fish

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on boat,

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transfer it to the port. After

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, place the

fish

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on freezer, and thaw it in fresh water to remove some of things not good

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, bacteria. The next

stag

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stage

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is cut open the

fish

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and throwing away the bad bowels from the

fish

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. Next. The

fish

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putting in

bowl

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a bowl

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salt

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of salt

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water and yellow

coloring

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colouring

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And

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Then

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fish

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the fish

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will be

cooking

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cooked

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and

smoke

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smoked

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chimney

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the chimney

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to transfer it after cook to cartoon and put

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apply

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inside the freezer

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0 *C,

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putting

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cold

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a cold

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store and

distribution

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distributed

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apply

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truck. The end. The

fish

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will sell to people in fishshop.

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Grammar

There are some grammatical inaccuracies, such as using 'specifics' instead of 'specifies,' and 'stages are made smoked fish' instead of 'stages involved in making smoked fish.' Revise these errors for better understanding.

Coherence

Make sure to clarify transitions between stages. Some sentences could be combined for better readability, for example, 'After then, place the fish on freezer, and thaw it in fresh water...' could be more clear if reorganized.

Task Response

Try expanding on some steps for clarity. For instance, what happens during 'putting the fish in bowl salt water and yellow coloring'? Explain this further to help the reader understand.

Task Response

You've captured the overall sequence of processes from fishing to selling in the fish shop, which is clear and covers essential steps.

Coherence

The paragraphing aligns fairly well with different stages in the process, maintaining a clear delineation between the steps involved.

Coherence

The use of sequential markers like 'Firstly,' 'Next,' and 'The end' provide a framework for your description, helping to guide the reader through the process.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

143 words

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The diagram details the process of making smoked fish.

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Topic: In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

As the world becomes technologically advanced,computers are replacing people at more and more jobs. what are some job positions that may be lost because of computers?What are some problems that may result from this situation?

In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

Nowadays, many people have to work longer time, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?