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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.
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The line graph demonstrates the quantity of waste manufactured by three companies from 2000 to 2015 One striking feature is that
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three companies illustrate significant changes in the amounts of waste
produce
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. Entities show
decrease
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a decrease
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sifgnificantly
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significantly
significant
exception
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of
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Company
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 C over the period . The highest indication was
company
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 A amounted to 12
tonnes
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 waste and the lowest proportion was
Company
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 C accounted for 4
tonnes
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while
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 B showed 8
tonnes
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 in 2000
Company
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 B showed
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a sharply
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sharply
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 increase from 8
tonnes
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 to 3 .
Company
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 A demonstrated
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a significantly
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significantly
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 increase from 12 to 8
tonnes
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 .
Company
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 C illustrated
sharply grow
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 which equal to 10
tonnes
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words company, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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