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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The provided bar chart demonstrates the costs of two different countries on consumer products in 2010. The units are measured in pounds sterling. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the
UK
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 spent much more money on private vehicles, books, and digital cameras. Meanwhile, the expenditure of
France
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 exceeded the
UK
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 on goods,
such
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 as computers and perfume. A closer look at the data reveals that people in the
UK
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 mainly purchased automobiles at just over £450000,
while
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 citizens in
France
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 paid £400000.
Moreover
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, in terms of computers, it was reversed, and individuals in
France
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 prioritized the usage of computers and invested more than the
UK
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 (respectively at around £370000 and £350000). Regarding other items, there was a significant money separated for books in the United Kingdom, overpassing
France
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 by about £110000.
Additionally
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, the lowest amount paid by
France
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 was for perfume which accounted for £200000,
whereas
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 in the
UK
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, it was less than £150000.
In addition
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, there was a considerable difference in the costs for cameras in the
UK
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 and
France
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, spending approximately £350000 and £15000, respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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