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Some people say that living in the countryside is disadvantageous for people.What extent do you agree or disagree.

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I agree with the opinion given to a small extent,
however
,I mainly stand against
this
 idea for more plausible reasons.Over the period,there has
an
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 argument about living
countryside
 and
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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.l accept rural
areas
 have drawbacks but l
am mostly disagree
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am mostly disagreed
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of
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with
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 that opinion,
countryside
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the countryside
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 is
disadventagous
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disadvantageous
 for
people
. It's
underible
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undeniable
 that,living in rural
areas
have
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has
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 special difficulties.Be it
employmen
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employment
 or
entertaing
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entertaining
 life
doesnt
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doesn't
exit
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exist
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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.There are a lot of unemployed
people
 because low number of workplaces and low
payment
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.Another problem is
shortage
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a shortage
the shortage
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 of social activities and entertaining
oppotunities
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opportunities
.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
,there are
number
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a number
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 of benefits
living
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to living
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 in rural
areas
.
Firstly
,
people
 live in the
countrysie
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countryside
 they live long given that fresh air.
Secondly
,the
rates
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rate
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 of crime is low level in rural
areas
.If crimes do occur,more than half of them
happens
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happen
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 in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 not
countryside
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the countryside
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 so that,
people
 feel
safety in
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safe
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 there. In conclusion,
l'm
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l
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 mostly disagree with that opinion because there
are
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is
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 a lot of different
adventegous
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advantages to
 living in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more logically to enhance coherence and cohesion. Consider using more transitional phrases to ensure a smooth flow of ideas.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. This will help strengthen your argument and make it more persuasive.
Language & Style
Double-check your writing for grammatical errors and improve your vocabulary range for clarity.
Task Achievement
You've clearly stated your stance, showing both agreement and disagreement, which demonstrates a nuanced understanding of the topic.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in understanding your viewpoint clearly.
Content
You addressed key points, such as employment and safety, to support your argument about living in the countryside.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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