The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990

and 1999.
The diagram illustrates the number of car thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries, namely Great Britain, Sweden, France, and Canada in a 10-year period. Looking at the
overall
structure, it is readily apparent that most countries experienced a downward trend or
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stability,
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rates for
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noticeable
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increased.
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, Great Britain had the largest number of automobile thefts within the time frame. Looking at the graph in more detail, in the initial period, Great Britain started with the highest proportion compared to others, at 18 cars per year, and reached its peak in 1996 at 20 but by 1990 the rate had slightly decreased to 17. The other countries started fewer than 10 incidents per year, with
Swedan
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Sweden
at 9, Canada at 7 and France at 6.
Swedan
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Sweden
and Canada witnessed a similar trend, despite some
fluctations
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during the decade, both ended
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just over 5 incidents. In comparison, in Sweden, automobile theft rates skyrocketed to nearly
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15 in the ultimate years.
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