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The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.
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The given diagram depicts information on
production
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the production
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 of one type of biofuel
that
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named
as
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ethanol
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.
Overall
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, it is an
11 stage
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, man-made process,
begins
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that begins
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 with the
consuming
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consumption
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 and sunlight as the energy source by plants, and some chemicals and microbes being added to cellulose
that is
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 produced from harvest and ends with the emitting
carbon
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 footprint from vehicles that used
ethanol
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 as the biofuel. First of all, plants and other trees absorb
carbon
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dioxide
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 and sunlight as the energy source and
then
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 they are collected as harvest by people. After that,
gathered
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the gathered
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 harvest is put into
shredder
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a shredder
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 machine in order to decrease the size of it.
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 pre-processed materials become cellulose, and it is put into some chemicals to process before transforming to
sugar
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a sugar
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 compound. Following that, some microorganisms are added to the sugar to
synthesis
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synthesise
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ethanol
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, which is one type of biofuel.
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created
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ethanol
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 is used by a lot of means of transport,
such
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 as cars, trucks and planes. These vehicles emit
carbon
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dioxide
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 into the atmosphere, and
subsequently
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, the cycle returns to its initial phase with the consumption of
carbon
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dioxide
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 and sunlight by plants.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol, carbon, dioxide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biomass
  • ethanol
  • fermentation
  • microorganisms
  • yeast
  • carbon dioxide
  • distillation
  • purification
  • dehydration
  • raw materials
  • storage
  • distribution
  • renewable energy
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable fuel
  • concentration
  • impurities
  • alcohol content
  • crop growth
  • conversion process
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