Some people think technology development decreases crime, while others believe it actually encourages crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some argue that illegal activities will be reduced by technological advancement,
whereas
others have the opposite opinion, and believe it can promote illicit affairs. This
essay will discuss that although
advanced technology may give rise to crime, it is more beneficial for security
services.
On the one hand, cybercriminal is a phenomenon that is
a result of high-tech. Apps and digital appliances are invariably vulnerable to hacking and it makes a good opportunity for culprits. The number of accounts that are attacked by hackers is increasing every day. Hence
, authorities should adopt some approaches to promote public awareness to know how should they protect themselves in the internet atmosphere. In Iran, for example
, many bank accounts were hacked in the last
decade. Therefore
, the government sent numerous public messages and produced some TV shows about how people should behave in these types of media. Consequently
, the proportion of cybercriminals reduced dramatically.
On the other hand
, advanced technology offers various effective tools in the case of security
improvements. The power of security
by using new inventions is not comparable with the past. for example
, the high- tech cameras or theft alarms are two efficient new technologies that are used widely and it is proven that they have a significant impact on reducing thefts. Another prime example is the highly sensitive system that is
currently used in airports to detect any weapons or drugs that may passengers carry so that it leads to safer flights.
In conclusion, according to
the progress of technology in each part of our lives, new types of digital illicit attempts are increasing, but it is preventable by rising public technological knowledge. However
, developments in the security
system that are the result of technological power are undeniable.Submitted by elahepoorhosein1990 on
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Task Response
Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines the key points that will be discussed in the essay. This will guide the reader through your arguments more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Transition between paragraphs can be smoother to ensure a seamless flow of ideas.
Task Response
While examples are provided to support your points, try to diversify them to include more global perspectives, which can strengthen the argument.
Task Response
The essay provides a balanced discussion of both views, which addresses the task adequately.
Task Achievement
The points made are generally well-supported with examples, making the arguments more compelling.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs discussing each view, and a strong conclusion.
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