Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is sad that
music
could play as a connecting bridge between individuals with distinctive age groups and cultural backgrounds.
However
, some
people
see
music
as an only entertaining tool. I completely agree with the former opinion
Music
is a universal language which we are born with.
As a result
, every human being already can communicate with the notes immediately after they are born. We could acknowledge
this
in the reaction of any newborn baby to a lullaby.
Moreover
, our first tool to communicate with our parents
also
is musical crying.
For instance
, many experts believe we can find out the newborns’ requests based on their crying tones.
This
means we are familiar with
music
from the beginning of our life journey.
This
gives us the opportunity to make contact with any other person around the globe without knowing their mother tongue.
Music
notes affect us psychologically.
This
means they can change our brain’s biochemical functions.
For example
, many studies confirmed the role of
music
in the management of
people
with psychological disorders.
In addition
, Surprisingly, musical notes from different cultures act
similarly
on humans and show the same effects. Studies
also
showed when a song hits the public every age group and
people
from different ethnicities generally have a positive reaction to it.
For example
, we can see
this
universal acceptance of hit songs like Celendions’. In conclusion,
although
there is a minority of
people
who follow
music
just in terms of entertainment, we biologically and by instinct comprehend
music
and utilize it to communicate with our kind and even other species.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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