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The table below gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006, in which people were asked which communication skills were essential in their jobs.

The table below gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006, in which people were asked which communication skills were essential in their jobs.
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The table gives information about communication skills which people considered
essntial
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essential
 in their jobs and the changes
of
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in
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 these factors between 1997 and 2006 in per cent.
Firstly
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, the table is divided
in to
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 2 major communication groups (
intrnal
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internal
 and external).
In contrast
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,
internal
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the internal
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 section refers to inside firm connections and the communications with coworkers. In
this
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 part, we can see the most important factor is listening carefully to colleagues with 38 per cent, which
also
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 had the biggest rise
between
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 all the other skills and rose by 9%
at the end
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 of the period.
Also
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, instructing or training people was the second
important
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most important
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 skill among internal ones with
5
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% rise from 1997 to 2006.
On the other hand
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,
external
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the external
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 part formed a generally more important part of the whole examination. In
this
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 section, the most essential
skills
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skill
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 was considered to be dealing with people with a massive number of 60%.
This
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 figure rose by 5% in 2006.
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, advising
clints
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clients
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 and knowledge of particular products or services, had almost the same results throughout
out
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apply
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the period with small similar rises. But, selling a product or service, decreased by 3% (from 24 to 21).
To sum up
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, it can be seen that
team works
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teamwork
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 within
company
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the company
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 had slight
increases
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increased
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,
while
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 selling products or services decreased slowly throughout the time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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