The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of five different kinds of technologies used in
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households in the
U.S
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U.S.
from 1995 to 1999, over a period of
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4 years
. It can be clearly seen that the washing machine was the most used electronic device
while
the percentage of internet and DVD player usage accounted for the smallest proportion, which was
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relatively
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similar
. Turning to the graph in more detail, in 1995, 60% of
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U.S. citizens had washing
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compared to 40% of
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computers
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,
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and 25
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% of
DVD
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the DVD
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player
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players
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. By 1997, the percentage of washing
machine
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and
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had steadily increased to 70% and 50% respectively. In the meantime, the figures for
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phones
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, DVD
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players
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and
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internet
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never surpassed 30%. Between 1997 and 1999, the percentage of
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experienced a significant
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of 20%, overtaking that of compute. Meanwhile, other categories
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showed an upward trend all the way
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through
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the end.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Households
  • Technology adoption
  • Growth rate
  • Decline rate
  • Milestones
  • Obsolete
  • Societal factors
  • Economic conditions
  • Advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Market saturation
  • Trend analysis
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