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The graph below gives information about household computer possession in one European country between 1997 and 2011.

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The line chart illustrates how household computer possession changed in one European country from 1997 to 2011. During the period, the
number
 of
households
 possessing one computer only, two
computers
as well as
 three or more
computers
 increased, but it was the
number
 of
households
 with three or more
computers
 that stood out as it was far higher than the
number
 of others, rising from about 42 to around 44.
However
, the
number
 of
households
 having two
computers
 saw a significant growth from nearly 5 in 1997 to just below 30 in 2011. The
number
 of
households
 with one computer was always the lowest, no more than 10 during the whole period.
By contrast
, the
number
 of
households
 without
computers
 experienced a dramatic fall between 1997 and 2011. From approximately 50, the largest figure at the beginning, there was a stable decrease of 10 until 2005, when it started to rise to the peak of 40, followed by a considerable drop by 2007.
Finally
, it ended at just over 20, which was smaller than the
number
 of
households
 with three or more
computers
 and two
computers
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the total
number
 of
households
 with
computers
 grew during the 14 years.
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