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More and more universities are replacing face-to-face teaching with online courses. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

More and more universities are replacing one-on-one teachings with online
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 and materials which is the new trend in education.
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, it has not been immune to criticism and drama with enthusiasts supporting
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 change and some who are steadfast in their belief that the old and traditional way is better.
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 face-to-face teaching is not without its merits, I myself align more with those supporting
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 change. First and in my opinion the most important advantage that online
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 have over their counterparts is the convenience that they provide and how effortless they can be. By using the Internet as an infrastructure for learning as opposed to doing it in person, we can eliminate a lot of major and minor nuisances and annoying affairs
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 as but not limited to commuting. Take a student
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,
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 student may spend well over an hour commuting to their university to take but one class, but with online
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 they do not have to do that and in the process, they would save time and may spend it somewhere more fruitful.
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, the fact that online
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 are repliable is a great advantage, one that in my view does not get enough credit. Some students may need to restudy and since online
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 can be watched after the course is done they can do it without hassle, a luxury unknown to the old way of learning.
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 to that, they can change the playback speed to their own liking.
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, a student who is in a hurry to study can do it easily owing to the fact that these
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 can be recorded and
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 can be watched later at their convenience.
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, it is my belief that
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 being present at a class and studying there is not without any advantages, the option to have online
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 and the benefits that they offer outweigh the ones of the former way of learning. Benefits
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 as convenience and reliability , in my view, are valuable.

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Task Response
Ensure to maintain consistency in terms used throughout the essay. 'Face-to-face teaching' was mentioned, but the term 'one-on-one' is slightly different. Consistent terminology helps to avoid confusion.
Task Response
Make sure to support points with specific examples or evidence, especially when evaluating the drawbacks of face-to-face learning compared to online learning. This strengthens your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize ideas into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one aspect. This improves the readability and flow of the essay.
Task Response
You have a clear and well-presented argument about why online courses are beneficial, integrating two major points: convenience and replayability.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay contains a logical structure with an introduction, main body, and conclusion. This progression effectively guides the reader through the argument.
Task Response
The examples provided, such as saving time from commuting and being able to replay courses, are relevant and solidly support your argument.
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