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When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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It is common, that
people
 decide what kind of
person
 they have met by the
first
 look.
This
 essay explains why it could be negative for a
person
, by telling about
a
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 possibility of wrong decisions and reputation issues. Usually, a
person
 bases
the
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 opinion about new
people
by
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on
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the
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apply
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first
 impressions. It could be explained by the fact that
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the human's
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human's
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human
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 brain does not like uncertainty and requires to
categories
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 any new incoming information, no matter
is
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if is
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 it another
person
 or event.
For example
, in many cultures and countries a great
amount
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 of fancy phrases, related to the judgement
by
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the
first
 look, could be found, which could be
consired
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considered
 as
a
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proof of
commonness
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the commonness
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 of
such
behavior
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.
As a result
, the wrong decision could be made,
moreover
, not only a good
person
 could be taken as
whom
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who
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 is not liked, but in a worse case, who could be qualified as a negative
person
, might look reliable and trusted and sympathetic.
Additionally
 to the
first
 point, being a
fast-thinker
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fast thinker
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 in
the
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a
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 particular situation could harm
people
's
reputation
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. Possible inappropriate actions based on misconsiderations could lead other
people
 to avoid relationships with
such
person
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a person
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,
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 because they will try to avoid
to be
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 unfairly assessed or misunderstood in a few minutes. As an example, many
trainer
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trainers
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that
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who
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 help others to develop their communication skills, say in their lessons that
this
 is a very important rule to better know the
person
, before many any conclusions. In conclusion, despite it is a common
behavior
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behaviour
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 to quickly decide what kind of
person
 was met, it mostly has
the
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negative outcomes.
Such
 as to have a harmed reputation or to make a wrong finding about
person's
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a person's
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characted
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character
 and intentions.
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The essay presents plausible arguments about the potential negative effects of quick judgment, showing critical thinking.

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • first impression
  • initial judgment
  • stereotypes
  • assess
  • non-verbal cues
  • body language
  • appearance
  • facade
  • misjudgments
  • unfair judgments
  • decision-making process
  • social situation
  • character
  • repeated interactions
  • open-mindedness
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