The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two provided charts describe the proportions of travellers
visited
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who visited
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to
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apply
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Orange
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city
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City
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in two distinctive years, 2006 and 2016
as well as
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depict the list of activities the tourist was attracted to
such
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as
theartre
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theatre
theatres
,
restaurants
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,
museums
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, annual
events
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and
other
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others
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.
Overall
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, in 2006, the total number of
visitor
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visitors
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to the
city
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was approximately 1 million
whereas
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after a decade it increased by nine hundred thousand.
While
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,
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apply
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the primary reason
of
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for
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visiting the region was annual
events
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in 2006, it
becomes
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became
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secondry
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secondary
second
in 2016.
However
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, individuals got more
intrested
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interested
in
restaurants
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in 2016 making it
main
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the main
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cause of their
visit
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visits
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. Having a glance at the pie charts, it is evident that in 2006, 45% of
tourist
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tourists
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used to attend annual
events
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in
metropolitan
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the metropolitan
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whereas
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more than
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a quater
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quater
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quarter
were
intrested
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interested
in
museums
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(27%). The theatres (13%) and
restaurants
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(11%) were almost equally popular with
the
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a
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diffrence
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difference
of 3
percentage
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per cent
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. Just 5% was individuals used to come to the
city
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for other reasons. After a decade,
significant
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a significant
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change was noticed in the
prefrences
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preferences
of travellers.
While
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restaurants
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had
sheer
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a sheer
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one tenth
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one-tenth
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of travellers in 2006, it
become
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became
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major
reasons
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reason
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behind having more
tourist
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tourists
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in the
city
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with
the
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a
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ratio of 41% in 2016. Followed by, annual
events
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and
museums
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which
was
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were
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32% and 11% respectively.
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Although
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However
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, other
motive
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motives
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or
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for
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going to
museums
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was
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were
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at
similar
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a similar
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point other
that
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than
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was
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apply
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8% in 2016.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, restaurants, museums, events with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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