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Band 7.5

There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. I your letter •Describe the complaints that have been made •Say why the reception area is important •Suggest how the reception area could be improved

Dear Company Manager, Hello, I hope
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 message finds you well. I am writing to you about the suggestions which can be used to improve the company’s lobby condition. As you know, the company faces some complaints about the condition of the reception area, because the visitors are not satisfied with its condition. These complaints include a poor ventilation system, uncomfortable chairs, and most importantly, a small sitting space for our patrons. Since the reception area is the first place which our customers and visitors face, it is highly important that
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 place appears comfy, modern and spacious to them. If our visitors feel that our company respects them by hosting them in a comfortable and convenient lobby, the company’s reputation will be boosted significantly. I suggest that if we can expand our current lobby by adding the warehouse space to it, and refurbish the whole region with a modern architecture, we will have a spacious reception area with a proper ventilation system.
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, we ought to replace the current uncomfortable chairs with comfy sofas. I highly appreciate that you asked for my suggestions, and I am highly thankful that you spent time reading my letter. I am looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Your sincerely, Reza Ghorbani.

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task response
The letter covers all three parts. Make each part clear: 1) the complaints, 2) why the area matters, 3) the changes you want.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in each paragraph and add easy links like and, so, because, also to tie ideas.
format and tone
Use formal tone and close properly with Yours sincerely in a standard letter format.
content
The letter states the main needs: complaints, importance, and changes.
tone
It keeps a polite tone toward the manager.
strength
It gives simple ideas to fix the issues, such as better seating and more space.
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