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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 how different common advantages and
disadvantages
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according to
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 a survey of visitors
of
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to
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 Bowen Island. It is
clean
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clear
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 that at the beginning of the
period
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period,
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 construction contributed the least
disadvantages
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 of Bowen Island and advantages
was
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were
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 the most significant sector. In
comparsion
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comparison
,
at the end
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 of the period
high
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the high
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 cost of living and people became the largest segment and the lowest
contribute
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contribution
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 was made by
financial
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finances
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, food quality and good accommodation. As easily seen, the high cost of living and the people
are possess
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possess
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 almost the half of the pie chart with the rating respectively 50 and 42 per
cent
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. For the smaller place, the scenery of
advanatges
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advantages
 is weaker than
entertainment
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the entertainment
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 of
disadvantages
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by exaclty
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exaclty
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exactly
 10 per
cent
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,
while
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 the scenery takes 35 per
cent
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. The food quality is 10 per
cent
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 and the weather is 15 per
cent
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, so easily do addition it will show that takes a quarter of the pie chart of common
disadvantages
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. Parallel to advantages, the total for the rest of
two
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the two
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last
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 segments
are
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is
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 23 per
cent
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, for the culture is 12 per
cent
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 and good
accommodtion
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accommodation
 is 11 per
cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words disadvantages, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scenic beauty
  • peaceful environment
  • wildlife viewing
  • limited accessibility
  • high costs
  • lack of amenities
  • tourist experience
  • perceived strongly
  • overwhelmingly stands out
  • main features
  • key advantages
  • primary disadvantages
  • notable aspects
  • common perceptions
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