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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 how different common advantages and
disadvantages
according to
 a survey of visitors
of
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to
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 Bowen Island. It is
clean
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clear
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 that at the beginning of the
period
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period,
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 construction contributed the least
disadvantages
 of Bowen Island and advantages
was
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were
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 the most significant sector. In
comparsion
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comparison
,
at the end
 of the period
high
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the high
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 cost of living and people became the largest segment and the lowest
contribute
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contribution
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 was made by
financial
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finances
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, food quality and good accommodation. As easily seen, the high cost of living and the people
are possess
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possess
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 almost the half of the pie chart with the rating respectively 50 and 42 per
cent
. For the smaller place, the scenery of
advanatges
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advantages
 is weaker than
entertainment
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the entertainment
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 of
disadvantages
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by exaclty
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exaclty
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exactly
 10 per
cent
,
while
 the scenery takes 35 per
cent
. The food quality is 10 per
cent
 and the weather is 15 per
cent
, so easily do addition it will show that takes a quarter of the pie chart of common
disadvantages
. Parallel to advantages, the total for the rest of
two
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the two
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last
 segments
are
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is
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 23 per
cent
, for the culture is 12 per
cent
 and good
accommodtion
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accommodation
 is 11 per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words disadvantages, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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