The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by those visitors in that period. Write at least 150 words.

The chart illustrates the
number
of individuals who visited
US
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the US
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from
UK
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the UK
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and
UK
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from
US
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and
also
depicts the
money
spent by these individuals from 2011 to 2015. After analysing the graph, it can be clearly seen that 33000 individuals from
UK
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the UK
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visited
US
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the US
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in 2011
while
27000 visited
UK
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the UK
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in the same year and
money
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the money
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spent by
UK
tourists was higher than
US
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the US
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,
was
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apply
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around about 4000
dollar
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dollars
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.In 2012 the
number
of
visitors
was almost equal in both countries and
Uk
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UK
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tourists spent amount larger than US.
Whereas
, the digits of
UK
visitors
and cash spent by
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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was
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were
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greater than US in 2013. Moving towards, the figures
of
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for
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visitors
and
money
spent by
UK
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the UK
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both increased in 2014 as compared to
US
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the US
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.
Whilst in
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In
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the
last
year the
number
of
Uk
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UK
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visitors
was
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apply
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climbed to 3500 and spending amount was
also
reached to uppest value
about
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of about
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6000
millions
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million
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however
US tourists
was
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were
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acerlated but spending was low in 2015.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the
number
of US
visitors
was
upper
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higher
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but
money
spent by US
visitors
was down as compared to
UK
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the UK
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, uk, money, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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