Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The pie chart shows in which location of an Australian town dance classes are being held, and the bar chart illustrates the number of attendees.

It is clear that
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private studios are the most common location for
dance
classes
.
Overall
, ballet is the most popular kind of
dance
with young people under 11,
while
children between 11 and 16 would rather participate in modern
dance
classes
. As depicted in the pie chart, private studios accommodate almost half of the
classes
in
this
town. School halls, which have after-school programs, and community halls and other places account for almost 20 per cent of the
classes
.
However
, the fewest
classes
(at 10%) are in college-based studios. It can be seen that
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Ballet which is the most popular kind of
dance
among children under 11, is the least favourable for participants between 11 and 16, respectively 600 and 300
students
. The opposite pattern goes for modern
dance
.
Whereas
it has the most number of
students
between 11 and 16, it is the least liked by
students
under 11. Tap
classes
receive almost the same number of
students
(about 450).
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