Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically.Others,however,believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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,issues concerning
school
types have sparked much debate.Some people assert that single-sex
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students
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academic results,
whereas
many others argue that mixed
schools
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for
students
to experience real adult life.Personally,I am in favour of the latter view. Convincing arguments can be made that mixed
schools
have the potential of letting
students
improve their social skills.
Firstly
,
Students
attending
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mixed
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normally get familiar with the opposite gender,they have a great opportunity to observe the nature of
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sex and learn how to interact and handle with them closely.To illustrate,
students
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physical appearance and mental between
genders
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early age, helping them
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with conflicts
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because of the differences.
Therefore
,their social skills would certainly be developed.
Besides
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school
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offer their student rising student’s problem-solving skills.
For example
,
both
genders
must learn how to cope when it
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situation
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where they have
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with each
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which will soon occur in their
real life
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society.
Lastly
,mixed
schools
provide
students
with real-life
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where
both
genders
exist.To make
this
clearer,
students
that surrounded by
both
genders
with get familiar with
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real life
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circumstance
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in which
both
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. I admit that single-sex
schools
do have several benefits.
in other words
, single-sex
students
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effort into studying without being distracted by the opposite gender,helping
students
to stay focused on their learning.Even so,some
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said that
students
from single-sex
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are more likely to face anxiety disorder when living in
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reality.
Consequently
,the benefits of single-sex
schools
are quite limited . In summary,I would concede that single-sex
schools
have some advantages.Despite that,mixed
schools
certainly benefit
students
in a much better way.
Overall
,I am convinced that
students
should go to mixed
schools
.
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  • minimize distractions
  • gender-related learning styles
  • tailored learning environment
  • sense of empowerment
  • underrepresented
  • bridge the gender gap
  • emulate real-world environments
  • promoting interactions
  • communicate and collaborate
  • break down gender stereotypes
  • mutual respect
  • inclusivity
  • well-rounded individuals
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