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In the last decade, there has been an increase in the number of variety of online courses available to adults. While welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, other student see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course.

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 an upward trend in the number of online learning platforms which are
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 debate over whether web-based learning
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traditional education or not.
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e-learning has
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 benefits and drawbacks and
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 essay will explore both of these. On the one hand, one of the main
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online education is that it might mitigate some
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, including interpersonal
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teamwork
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working
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,of the
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knowledge on
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in turn they do not discuss the topic with their peers, leading to
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 their communication
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. Another negative aspect of
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internet-based teaching
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might
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distract
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 weak internet connection or
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 from the house might disturb the
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, which leads to a decline in academic performance.
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, there are many benefits of
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online
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due to
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 easier access,
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 and cost-effectiveness.
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perks
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internet-based
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time saving
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students
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 just connect their
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devices
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( mobile phones, computer or laptop) to
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the internet
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a button, and enter the lesson. Even though, people do not devote their
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travelling in order to study as
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 of
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traditional education.
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, it can be more affordable rather than classroom teaching with regards to the annual university price, and
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transportation
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, the cost of
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online
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web platforms
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IT
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 field, which is as lower
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compared
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 ordinary teaching. In conclusion,
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 there are some disadvantages of e-learning
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 of
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disappearing
, it has numerous advantages
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time
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.

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content
Ensure all arguments are supported with clear and relevant examples. While examples were provided, they should clearly demonstrate the point being discussed to enhance clarity and relevance.
language
A few grammatical and vocabulary inaccuracies are present (e.g., "There are an upward trend" -> "There is an upward trend," "disattract" -> "distract"). Reviewing and correcting language errors will improve clarity.
structure
Expand on the introduction to provide more context on the debate regarding online vs. traditional education, which could enhance the background and importance of the discussion.
content
The essay presents a balanced view of both the advantages and disadvantages of online courses, which fulfills the task requirements.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are clearly delineated, providing a coherent framework for the essay.
evidence
You used examples to support your points, which strengthens the arguments made throughout the essay.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Self-paced learning
  • Virtual classroom
  • Online assessments
  • Course accessibility
  • Remote education
  • Interactive modules
  • Internet connectivity
  • Synchronous and asynchronous learning
  • Instructor support
  • Peer collaboration
  • Educational technology
  • Blended learning
  • Student engagement
  • Learning autonomy
  • Webinars
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • Flexible scheduling
  • Traditional education
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