The unlimited use of cars may cause problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clearly structured conclusion. Consider summarizing your main points and presenting a final judgement or solution in the last paragraph.
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Try to expand your essay by discussing more problems caused by cars, such as environmental pollution and noise. Also, include more solutions and reasons why cars shouldn't be discouraged.
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Consider providing specific examples or studies to support your claims about the increase in cars or their environmental impact. This will make your argument more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Your opening paragraph effectively introduces the topic and hints at the points you will discuss.
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You correctly identified a problem associated with car usage – air pollution due to fuel emissions.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
Today, It can be seen that social media has developed very fast and commonly, so many individuals can follow the same movies, censures, advertisements, and TV channels. Although many point out that the characteristics of countries are becoming less obvious. The writer of this essay will consider the pros and cons to give my opinion that will support the advantages that the popularity of multinational films, commercials, and television channels has brought many benefits such as increasing cultural exchanges, expanding knowledge, and providing diverse entertainment experiences for everyone than lacking reflection of reality and cultural diversity.
In the business context, rewarding outstanding performance has been a frequently-used method. It motivates good employees to work more diligently. Yet, there are also drawbacks affecting the morale of others who could not meet the standard of work. As a result, this passage will deliberate its effectiveness in managing the organization and other compensational alternatives for exceptional contributions.
The increasing rate of crime among adolescents has provoked alarm among authorities, parents and teachers. Diverse contributory factors can be held accountable for this critical issue, among which media and parents play a crucial role, and the problem will not be addressed unless the appropriate remedies are obtained and prompt actions are taken accordingly.
troublemaking pupils in educational establishments have a drawback impact on other students. Students who disobey the rules and disrespectful should be studied and taught in separate classes. From my point of view, this essay not only agrees with the latter statement, but also agrees with the viable solution given due to the obedient get bullied by them, and the reduction of teaching adolescents who really want to learn.
There is a common belief that we have to contend that embracing challenging situations like an unsatisfactory job or financial scarcity, is optimal. Conversely, others argue that this is more beneficial if we actively seek ways to advance and enhance such circumstances. In my opinion, I completely agree with the second statement. In this essay, I will elaborate on my views regarding this issue while providing merits and demerits for both perspectives.