Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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advance
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techology
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technology
generation,
people
acquire
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information
from everywhere
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less
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nowadays,but they are not allowed to use these,I still think it is not free in our society and not below
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everyone.
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who think to get other
people
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information
are easy and free to complete their
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achievement
.Take,
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large of
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many ways,tests and
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whether is
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wrong
or right.It is
convient
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convenient
and free.
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,I do not think they may work out
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fast
because they are impossible to
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can find
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develop
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peronal
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personal
thinking
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because
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and
not
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have any activity.
On the other hand
,argue that
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individual
individuals
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is important because it is valuable to
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other
people
.Creativers use
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their
brain
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to make
some
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different
innovation
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,
some
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people
such
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pay
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price to use
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they
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will have a lot of motivations to do
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thinking by themselves can earn more money and more value in the world,they will improve
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their
skill and society develop
more
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better.I agree with
this
argument because if
people
spend a lot of
time
to make
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things
such
as scientific research, business and
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academic
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academics
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,they have to get some reward when they give the information to other
people
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,
people
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acquire something from
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every place
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. In conclusion,
although
get
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imformation
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information
nowadays is fast.It is some
people
spend
many
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time
to make
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making
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a speical
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speical
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special
product
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and
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in
his
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mind.
Therefore
.
it is
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can not
share
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to be free in my
veiw
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view
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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