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The two pie charts show the average spending of households in a country at two different points in its economic development.

The two pie charts show the average spending of households in a country at two different points in its economic development.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
water
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 used for different
purposes
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 in six regions worldwide.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 primary
water
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 was used for agricultural
purposes
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 in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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while
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 North
America
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 and
Europe
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 used primary
water
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 for industrial
purposes
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. Remarkably, the highest proportion of
water
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 was used for Agricultural aims,
specially
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, in Central
Asia
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. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that over three-fourths of
water
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 was allocated for agricultural
purposes
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 in South East Asian, Africa, and Central
Asia
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, with 81%, 84% and 88%, respectively, followed by South
America
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, with 71%,
finally
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, North
America
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 and
Europe
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, with 39% and 32%, respectively.
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,
Europe
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 used over half of the total
water
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 for industrial
purposes
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, with 53%, next is North
America
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, with 48%, and other areas used only under 12% for
this
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 purpose. Eventually, there are over 10% of the
water
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 used for domestic aims in North
America
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, South
America
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, and
Europe
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however
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 only under 10% of
water
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 were distributed for
this
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 purpose in Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purposes, america, asia, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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