The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart illustrates data concerning three difficulties (

learing

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learning

the local language, finding somewhere to live and making

friends

)

which

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that

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individuals experience in a new society when they emigrate.

Overall

, it is clearly evident that the problem with language has been increasing

when

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people get older.

In contrast

, problems associated

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with

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finding somewhere to live and making

friends

have been declining when they get older.

According to

the chart, learning the local language

atood

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stood

at the least issue

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among

those in the ages of 18 to 34 by 29%.

However

, it

enhanced

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increased

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by almost 5% for individuals in 35 to 54 years old and

then

rose dramatically to 54% for those who are over 55.

On the other hand

, the other two issues were the most significant ones for individuals under 54. The difficulties to finding somewhere to live

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and

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making

friends

for people between 18 to 34,

comprice

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comprise

comprises

comprised

40% and 46%

respectivaly

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respectively

and

then

, they

imroved

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improved

by the ages from 35 to 54 to 39% and 36%

respectivaly

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respectively

. After that,

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the ages of over

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55,

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they become the least

importance

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important

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and stood at 22% for finding somewhere to live and 23% for making

friends

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