A friend had a new born baby, you have picked up a present for the baby and want to visit to give it to him / her. Write a letter to : -Congratulate your friend -Tell him why you picked up the mentioned present. -Suggest arrangements for the visit.

#friend #baby #visit #-congratulate #-tell #-suggest #arrangements

Dear Joly, I hope you're doing great, I'

writing

this

message in order to say congrats

for

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the new baby! I'

really happy for you and can't wait to meet you and

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apply

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see your baby.

This

is the first time that

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apply

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one of my friends

gave

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has given

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birth, so it's a new experience for me. I'

very excited

for

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about

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the present that I just bought, because I

brought

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bought

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a pink dress as I promised you 5 years ago. The dress was out of stock for so long and I struggled a lot in order to get it,

this

is what makes it a very

spacial

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special

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gift for me. I wanna tell you that I'

planinng

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planning

planing

to visit you soon, but I'

very busy

this

week because of my work

hourse

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hours

horse

, so I decided to take a break for 6 days.

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, I will be free from

5th

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the 5th

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until the 11th of October. Please if you decide which day is suitable for you please let me know as soon as possible. See you soon, Nouf, Best wishes,

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Expresses excitement and personal connection effectively, adding warmth to the letter.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

178 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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