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. the bar chart compares the number of households categorized by annual income in the United States in three different years: 2007, 2011, and 2015.

. the bar chart compares the number of households categorized by annual income in the United States in three different years: 2007, 2011, and 2015.
The bar chart gives information about the
quantity
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number
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 of
households
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 categorized by annual
income
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 in the United States, in millions, in
three
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 different
years
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, 2007, 2011, and 1015 respectively. It can clearly be seen that the number of
households
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earned
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earning
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 over $100.000 in 2015 which was the biggest part among
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three
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the three
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years
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 mentioned, at about 33
million
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 families.
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, about 21
million
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households
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 still kept the same
income
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 during these
years
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 which made from $50.000 to $74.999 a year. In 2007, the number of families
had
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that had
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income
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 between $25.000 and $49.999 was 27
million
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.
However
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,
this
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 data increased by
three
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million
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 in 2011
,
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 and dropped
at
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to
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 28
million
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households
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 in the next 4
years
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. The range of annual
income
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 from $75.000 to $99.999 was the smallest sort that many
households
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 earned. In
three
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 different
years
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,
this
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 object fluctuated from 14 to 15
million
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households
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.
Furthermore
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, the quantity of families made over $100.000 per year which was almost two
time
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times
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 the $75.000 - $99.999 in 2011. Those number of
households
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 were 14
million
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 and 27.5
million
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 respectively.
Last
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 but not least, two ranges of
income
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 that seemed not to change over a 9-year period were the $50.00 - $74.999 and the $75.000 - $99.999. hey most kept stable at about 21 and 15
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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households
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 namely.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, income, three, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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