What are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports center that you visit. Write a letter to the sports center manager. In your letter: -Explain the problem. -Say how you feel about this problem. -Say what steps you would like the manager to take.

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

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letter to inform you that currently I

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am using

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the changing rooms in your

sports

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centre and I am not satisfied with the service. Recently, I had a

sports

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tournment

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tournament

of basketball in your

sports

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centre but I have a college exam on that day

also

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. So, after when I returned from

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apply

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college and went to

room

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my room

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to change my clothes, I

feel

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felt

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discomfort. Actually, I felt so uncomfortable at that time because the door lock was not working properly and I

feel

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felt

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unsafe

while

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changing clothes as there

are

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were

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so many people outside the

sports

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room. I request you to please check

the

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apply

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all the locks of the doors as it is very important so that all the participants feel safe

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changing their clothes. Yours faithfully, Simranjeet

kaur

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Kaur

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coherence cohesion

Improve sentence structures for clarity and coherence.

coherence cohesion

Keep paragraphs focused on single ideas to enhance clarity.

task achievement

The letter covers all the required points: explanation of the problem, feelings about it, and a suggestion for the center manager.

task achievement

The tone is polite and formal, which is appropriate for addressing a manager.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriate for a formal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

6.5

Single idea per paragraph

7.5

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

136 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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