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You’ve just returned from a disastrous holiday! It was not as described by the agent and you experienced serious problems. Write a letter of complaint to the agent. In your letter - remind the agent about the holiday - explain to them what happened - ask for compensation

#you’ve #holiday #agent #complaint #compensation
Dear Sir, I am really disappointed by your service as I really trust you because you have a good reputation but in my
case
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 it was really bad. Actually, I
remind
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 you about my holiday in advance so it was easy for you and for us to plan everything and
organized
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 in advance. But you really gave us
such
 a ridiculous service which put me in chaos to never trust you again.
First,
when we reached
at
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our destination
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because we were tired so we thought to
a
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have a short nap. After that, when we try to get our meal
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they ask for money for the food. We were shocked because it was included in our package and we
pay
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 by ourselves for our whole trip.
Moreover
, I request
to
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you to
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 pay our money back to our accounts as
according to
 me it was not fair to me and my family as I trust you
alot
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a lot
. I hope you never do
thing
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 in future with any of the
customer
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customers
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. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Simranjeet
kaur
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Kaur
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task achievement
Provide more specific details about the location and dates of your holiday for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Improve paragraph structure to enhance clarity and flow. Separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states the reason for writing the letter.
coherence cohesion
The closing is polite and anticipates a response.
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