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In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance. What are the causes of the phenomenon and what are some of the possible solutions?

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Consumption of
drugs
 that enhance an athlete’s endurance and stamina
are
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 on the rise, especially
with
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among
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 sportsmen and women who participate in prominent events
such
 as the Olympics. In
this
 essay, I will delve into some of the reasons
as to
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why
this
 happens and plausible ways to prevent
such
 unethical acts. With any sporting event, spectators are an integral part of it. We
also
 need to understand that personal glory is desired by human beings at some point in time of their life. It is no different that professionals in sporting careers feel that way. One of the possible reasons why these
drugs
 are on the rise is
due to
a
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 sense of superiority that the athlete gains when winning an event. Another reason perhaps could be peer pressure from the respective sporting committees to win and upkeep the pride of the nation. Sometimes an athlete is insufficiently remunerated to compete in these events.
Hence
 the motive to be financially stable is another factor.
Although
 the above social reasons are valid, we should not forget the addiction aspect of these
drugs
.
Due to
 the fact that the participant gets a sense of superpower and
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 status, they succumb to the consumption without the thought of side effects. The easy access to these
drugs
 on the black market is another reason why these unethical acts are on the rise. There are numerous ways in which we can deter
this
 act. Primarily, more stringent and frequent testing standards by event organizers will help. A moderate and healthy level of competition instilled by the coaches would ease some of
stress
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 that leads to the athlete’s desire to consume. Even though the salaries for these professionals are varied, adequate remuneration will help mitigate
this
 problem.
Further
 development of law enforcement to curb
illegal
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 sale of
such
drugs
 will
also
 alleviate the issue. In conclusion, perhaps one or multiple factors stated above might encourage a sportsperson to use banned
drugs
. But in my belief, if any one of the resolutions are put in effect we may notice a reduction in
such
 behavior.
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task achievement
Include more specific examples or evidence to support your points, especially when discussing the reasons behind drug use in sports. This will strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph flows smoothly with clear transitions to enhance the coherence and cohesion of your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a strong introduction and conclusion, which neatly frame the discussion.
task achievement
You have identified several relevant causes and potential solutions to the issue of banned substance use in sports, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Performance-enhancing drugs (PEDs)
  • Doping
  • Anti-doping regulations
  • Detection methods
  • Ban substances
  • Ethical issues
  • Health risks
  • Fair play
  • Sportsmanship
  • Stakes
  • Pressure to succeed
  • Enforcement
  • Awareness programs
  • Testing frequency
  • Entourage
  • Science advancement
  • Financial gains
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