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The graph shows the number of visitors to various art galleries in 2011.

The graph shows the number of visitors to various art galleries in 2011.
The graph shows the number of
visitors
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 to a variety of 6 most famous art galleries in 2011, located in different countries. The Louvre in France had the highest number of
visitors
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,
while
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 the State Hermitage in Russia had the lowest. The Louvre attracted around 8.8
million
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visitors
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, placing it significantly ahead of other museums.
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, the State Hermitage saw only 2.5
million
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visitors
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, marking the lowest count among the galleries. The Metropolitan Museum in the USA ranked
second,
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receiving approximately 6
million
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visitors
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, followed by the British Museum in the UK, which had about 5.8
million
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visitors
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. Meanwhile, the National Museum of Korea and the Museo del Prado in Spain had lower attendance, with 3.2
million
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 and 2.9
million
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visitors
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, respectively.
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, European museums tended to attract more
visitors
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 than those in Asia. The Louvre led in popularity,
while
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 the State Hermitage recorded the fewest
visitors
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 in 2011.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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