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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given table illustrates information about the
cost
 of minimum daily
water
 in five countries -Tanzania, Uganda, Pakistan, the UK, and the US.
also
showing
Wrong verb form
shows
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 the
cost
 as
percentage
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a percentage
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 of
average
Correct article usage
the average
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 daily wage.The price comparison using the US currency (Dollar).
overall
,
it is clear that
 Tanzania had the highest
cost
 of
water
 at 6.5
cents
,
while
 the United States had the
fewest
Correct word choice
lowest
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 at 0.85
cents
.
Moreover
, Pakistan and the UK had similar figures
of
Change preposition
for
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 daily
water
 per individual, with 1.76
cents
 and 1.3
cents
. respectively.
To begin
 with, Tanzania had
cost
Correct article usage
a cost
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 as
percentage
 5.7%, indicating a high level of
cost
 of daily
water
 per person.
Therefore
, the United Kingdom and the US had the lowest average as
percentage
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a percentage
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 of
cost
, at 0.013% and 1.006%. Uganda was the second
higher
Correct word choice
highest
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 country in
cost
Correct article usage
the cost
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 of daily
water
 at 4.1
cents
, and the as
percentage
 3.2%.
Furthermore
, Pakistan had a
percentage
 of average daily wage
1.1
Change preposition
of 1.1
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%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, water, percentage, cents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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