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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates information about the
cost
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 of minimum daily
water
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 in five countries -Tanzania, Uganda, Pakistan, the UK, and the US.
also
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showing
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shows
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 the
cost
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 as
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of
average
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the average
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 daily wage.The price comparison using the US currency (Dollar).
overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Tanzania had the highest
cost
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 of
water
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 at 6.5
cents
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,
while
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 the United States had the
fewest
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lowest
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 at 0.85
cents
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.
Moreover
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, Pakistan and the UK had similar figures
of
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for
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 daily
water
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 per individual, with 1.76
cents
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 and 1.3
cents
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. respectively.
To begin
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 with, Tanzania had
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cost
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a cost
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 as
percentage
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 5.7%, indicating a high level of
cost
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 of daily
water
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 per person.
Therefore
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, the United Kingdom and the US had the lowest average as
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of
cost
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, at 0.013% and 1.006%. Uganda was the second
higher
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highest
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 country in
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cost
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the cost
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 of daily
water
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 at 4.1
cents
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, and the as
percentage
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 3.2%.
Furthermore
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, Pakistan had a
percentage
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 of average daily wage
1.1
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of 1.1
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%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, water, percentage, cents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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