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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many shops closed and opened in one country in 7
years
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 from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the number of
openings
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 in 2011 was by far more than closures,
while
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 in 2018 their positions reversed.
Although
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 the number of
openings
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 saw a dramatic decline over the given period, closures experienced a slight decrease. The Figure for
openings
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 stood at around 8500 in 2011 before falling considerably to just under 4000 in 2012. After some fluctuations from 2012 to 2015, the number of
openings
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 remained stable at approximately 4000 in the next two
years
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.
Moreover
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, in the final year, the figure decreased by a quarter and ended the period at 3000. Regarding closed shops, they started at nearly 6500 in the first year. Despite having some ups and downs in 3
years
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, it reduced significantly to just around 500 in 2015 before recovering back to just over 5000 in the following year and in the
last
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 two
years
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, the closed shop's figure saw no change.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, openings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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