You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing task 1
The bar graph provides How data on the
number
of
teacher
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teachers
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, who were spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
Overall
it can be seen that the
teacher
spent teaching in
various
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four countries
like
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Japan
, Spain, Iceland and
USA
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the USA
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,
whereas
there are categories of
level
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levels
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such
as primary, lower secondary, and secondary.
Furthermore
, the
teacher
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teachers
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spent teaching for upper secondary was consistently the highest, and that for primary teachers was always the lowest. Looking at the crop data in more
details
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detail
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it is clear that
the amount of
teacher
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teachers
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who were
spent
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teaching
in
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at
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primary
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the primary
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level
which
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was the
number
of
hours
600 in
Japan
.
This
number
slightly
increase
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increased
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in Spain and the
number
of
hours
decreased
in
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to
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580
hours
whereas
in
USA
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the USA
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the
number
of
each
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apply
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teacher
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teachers
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spent teaching
in
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at
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primary
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the primary
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level which was grew
up
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by
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750
hours
. Turning to the remaining four data sets, it can be seen that the lower secondary
leves
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level
levels
lives
which was spent teaching in
Japan
in
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the
number
of
hours
650
while
this
value
a
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rose in Spain and
then
felt
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fell
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to about 600
hour
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hours
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in Iceland. The
USA
at
this
value rapidly increased by the
number
of
hours
1000.
Finally
, the
teacher
spent teaching for
uper
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upper
super
secondary was about the
number
of
hours
700 in
Japan
.
This
number
gradually climbed to
approximiately
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approximately
1180
hours
in
USA
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the USA
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, teacher, japan, usa, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts
  • number of hours
  • teaching
  • schools
  • countries
  • 2001
  • teachers
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • overview
  • average
  • year
  • difference
  • significant
  • range
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