The chart below shows what Anthropologie graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years

The chart below shows what Anthropologie graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years
The pie chart illustrates the situation of
graduates
from a specific university in terms of jobs,
while
the table focuses on the type of
their
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employment and salaries after 5 years of work.
Firstly
, it can be seen that the
most
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proportion of
graduates
were able to find full-time jobs after graduation with
52
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% rate.
Moreover
,
after
this
figure, the second biggest is part-time workers with 15 per cent
on
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total.
On the other hand
, 12% of
graduates
were totally jobless which is a little concerning.
Also
, the amount of people who started full-time postgrad studies was equal to the ones that are unknown. As for the table, freelance consultants and government sectors
,
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had exactly equal numbers in both
20k-49.99k
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the 20k-49.99k
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and 50k-74.99k salary
range
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with 5 and 15 per cent respectively.
Secondly
, the same amount of
graduates
were employed in 75000$-99999$ and +100000$ salary
range
by 40%. Government sectors,
however
, have seen more changes in
this
range
with 30% for 75k-99.99k and 50% for +100000k, which means
a
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better results.
To sum up
, the amount of employees in different salary ranges in private companies varied more and most of the workers were
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50
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the 50
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to 75k
range
by 35 per cent.
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