IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8.5

Your employer is considering ways to adjust work hours and reduce them overall. You have been asked to provide suggestions on how to implement this change. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: – Explain why you think reducing work hours is a good idea. – Suggest how the work hours could be reduced. – Describe how these changes could benefit the company.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to appreciate your thoughts about the
overall
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 reduction in working
hours
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 by redistribution of work. I would like to suggest some points in
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 regard. First of all, I advocate the thought that there is a need for
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 reduced office timings, which can stamp out the pressure and stress of work. After the COVID-19 pandemic, our staff had been working for ten
hours
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 to provide telecommunication services. So, now it is rather a good idea to decline
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 fast-paced process. At present, the work has been done in a single shift;
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, being the supervisor of the production unit, I feel, it can be divided into two shifts
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 a roster.
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 rearrangement can certainly help people to come in shifts and save their extra working
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 from 2 to 4.
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, I think
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 change is not only beneficial for our company to increase the profit as we can provide customer service in two shifts but
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 our company’s goodwill can be increased among employees and customers. Ultimately, the working
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 can be reduced up to 2
hours
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, both these recommendations can increase the total profit by up to one-third. I hope you will consider my suggestions
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 implementing
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 incredible approach. Yours sincerely, Jacob Brown

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task achievement
Consider adding more details about the specific benefits to employee well-being and productivity with shorter work hours.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen the logical flow by clearly connecting the suggestion of shift work with reduced work hours and the overall benefits.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and appropriate greeting and closing.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, such as reasoning for reduced work hours, suggested changes, and anticipated benefits.
suitable writing tone
The response thoroughly addresses the prompt and maintains a professional tone throughout, making it suitable for an employer.
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