The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graphs illustrate the trends in the variations in ownership of washing machines,

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, and

vacuum

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cleaners

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and the number of times for housework in a certain nation from 1920 to 2019.

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using three electrical appliances during the entire period.

Refrigerators

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showed a significant increase among them, and there was a decrease in the number of hours spent washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning. In the first data, washing machines,

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, and

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cleaners

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started with 40%, 30%, and 0% in 1920, respectively. In the first 40 years, the possession of

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rocketed to 90% in 1960

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the others showed a gradual growth. The percentage of

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was consistently the highest from 1960, with 90%,

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, that of

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cleaners

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caught it with 100% in 2000. Both

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and

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cleaners

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were the highest after 2000. In the second graph, there was a downward trend. In 1920, the number of hours for washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning was 50.

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, it declined dramatically from 50 to 20, in 1920 and 1960, respectively. After 1960, it showed a gradual decrease during the entire period.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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