The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs illustrate the trends in the variations in ownership of washing machines,
refrigerators
, and
vacuum
cleaners
and the number of times for housework in a certain nation from 1920 to 2019.
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using three electrical appliances during the entire period.
Refrigerators
showed a significant increase among them, and there was a decrease in the number of hours spent washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning. In the first data, washing machines,
refrigerators
, and
vacuum
cleaners
started with 40%, 30%, and 0% in 1920, respectively. In the first 40 years, the possession of
refrigerators
rocketed to 90% in 1960
while
the others showed a gradual growth. The percentage of
refrigerators
was consistently the highest from 1960, with 90%,
however
, that of
vacuum
cleaners
caught it with 100% in 2000. Both
refrigerators
and
vacuum
cleaners
were the highest after 2000. In the second graph, there was a downward trend. In 1920, the number of hours for washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning was 50.
However
, it declined dramatically from 50 to 20, in 1920 and 1960, respectively. After 1960, it showed a gradual decrease during the entire period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words refrigerators, vacuum, cleaners with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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